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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can the governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

#humans #environment #governments #address #people
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There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over the fact that the environment is taking a heavy toll on
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human’s
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 activities.
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 pressing problem. Without a shadow of a doubt, there are a wealth of means for
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 to destroy habitat, especially
air
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pollution
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. Nowadays,
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 an ever-growing demand for travel,
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 widely
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 fuel-powered
vehicles
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 which leads to the rocketing rate of car ownership. So that the amount of carbon dioxide emitted from these automobiles has increased alarmingly
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 it causes serious environmental
pollution
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.
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use
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 personal
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 when they participate in traffic,
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 as motorbikes,
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.
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fossil fuel combustion of transport is one of the tactics for humans to make
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pollution
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.
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 the damaging way to pollute
air
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 quality is widely acknowledged, the state and individual
people
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 should join hands to resolve the severe problem. In terms of the authorities, the state can introduce green tax and tax incentives to encourage
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 to
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 environmentally- friendly
vehicles
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.
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, Vietnam will reduce
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 when
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 buy or
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 hybrid
vehicles
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, namely Vinfast electric cars. With regard to individual
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,
people
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 should lower the frequency of using ownership
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 of using more eco-friendly bus systems which are powered by renewable energy.
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, Vietnamese
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renewable
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 powered
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 on a regular basis, namely Vinbus, Cat Linh-Ha Đong high-sky train station.
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, it is necessary for the authorities and individual
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 to cope with
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 urgent problem together. In conclusion,
air
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pollution
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 is one of the alarming matters brought about by
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 activities which brings undesirable impacts on the environment. So it is vital for the governors and individual
people
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 to find far-reaching solutions in order to reduce the amount of carbon footprint.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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