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Some people think that enjoying the present is more important than planning for the future for both countries and individuals, what extend do you agree or disagree?

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the public appears to be at the horns of a dilemma on whether appreciating the status-quo makes sense for nationalities and citizens
instead
 of envisioning forthcoming years. The envision of the forthcoming is able to prevent any
further
 abrupt disasters and risks even if focusing on the current situation might provide optimal moods without the anxiety of eventual between countries and individuals. Now I will mull both cases over a certain extent in order to voice my own standpoint in the end. If feeling over the moon on the present is explained as the coin flips over two sides, sceptics may regard it as no depression and fatigue. Albeit, focusing on the well-being or existence never guarantees better skill or positive habits which are extremely used to live in the treacle of happier living standards in the imminent years. Because our present turns into the past. Indeed
future
 turns into the present.
For instance
, famous scientists prove that students who study harder and do some better habits for planned academic skills tend to pass exams compared to those who always cram for tests.
That is
 worthy of avocating
future
 planning
instead
 of living in the present situation. As long as planning
future
 is advocated without suggesting any drawbacks over planning today, it is likely to make both citizens and nations far away from vulnerable with economic
future
 risks and wasting the nest egg for our offsprings. The reason why I suggest is that reliable long-lasting happy life and developed status of nations where there is less share of a gap between the wealthy and needies depend on how much
future
 risks and force major are estimated. To cite Covid pandemic economic status on individuals and Mongolia as an example. Taking everything above into conclusion, I would evidently deduce that intending in the
future
 is able to increase the risk tolerance
such
 as economic and healthy hardships. Because there is no vibrant
future
 when focusing on current well-being.
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