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many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal, people, however, think that other typesd of progress are equally important for a coountry. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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recently, the debate on whether economic progress is the most important goal for a country has been heated. As far as I am concerned, whether a country should prioritise its economic or other development depends on its developing states. In
this
 essay, I will outline both sides and elaborate on my view.
To begin
 with, economic expansion is one of the most effective instruments in poverty reduction.
For example
, for developing countries like Cambodia, development in finance exposes it to more work opportunities and boosts rapid
growths
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 in its finance.
Moreover
, improving economic growth can
also
 help a country to be wealthy.
For instance
, for some newly developed Asian countries, the progress in their economy leads to a higher quality of life as well as a higher standard of living.
Therefore
, for developing countries, economic progress can help curb poverty effectively.
On the other hand
, other development like educational processes may be more advantageous for developed counties to sharpen their competitive edge in the long run.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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