These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is certainly the case in my local area that many young
people
choose to leave their home village or town as soon as they finish college or when they first get full-time employment. There are several advantages to
this
.
Firstly
, it gives the individuals better opportunities to find more suitable jobs.
This
means they have much greater flexibility in the careers they can choose and are no longer forced to take the work available in the local area. A second benefit is that they have the chance to meet and work alongside a wider variety of
people
, which enriches their social and professional lives. Another relevant point is that moving to a place where they are anonymous allows
people
greater freedom to behave as they wish, without worrying about what those around them think.
However
, there are a number of drawbacks to
this
development, the most serious being loss of support. It is important for humans to feel that they are part of a community and can rely on family and friends for help, on a day-to-day basis. In a place where individuals know few
people
it is easy to become isolated and lonely. Related to
this
point is the fact that when
people
know very little about their neighbours, it is hard for mutual trust to develop. When
people
have lived in the same place or village all their lives, their personal and family backgrounds are widely known and
this
information can help others make reliable judgements, building personal and business relationships. On balance, I feel that
this
trend brings more negative outcomes than advantages and that it is leading to real problems of isolation and erosion of identity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • migration
  • globalization
  • socio-economic factors
  • traditional norms
  • cosmopolitan environment
  • brain drain
  • assimilation
  • gentrification
  • alienation
  • multiculturalism
  • infrastructure strain
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