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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#repair #buildings #money
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Some individuals think that capital should spend on the
construction
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 of new
houses
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 rather than repairing vintage homes because repair work is quite expensive. I partially agree with the fact that making a new building is easy these
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. In the forthcoming paragraph, I shall discuss my viewpoint.
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 with, new development of homes these
days
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 are quite easy and un-expensive because in recent time we have the technique to construct homes easily in affordable price it
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 helps the society to create new jobs.
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, these
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construction
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 did not take much place of land to develop a society which is very useful for future aspect because of numerous growth in population, these
days
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 the
construction
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 takes place in the form of many stories towers in which thousands of family can live.
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, in the area of 1000 square-metre hundreds of
houses
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 can build in the 4 story building.
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, it
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 helps the government to provide amenities easily like gas supply, transportation system because in the new home system people live in the closer area. So, providing
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 facilities become easy for the authorities.
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, the
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 of a new home creates lots of problems as well.
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, making new
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 required lots of natural resources, which we have in limited quantities.
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, Sand, Cement, petroleum.
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, it
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 creates problems for our ecosystem, many reports suggest that
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 causes air pollution. To conclude, Building new
houses
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 can be easy and less expensive it
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 creates opportunity in society.
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, it
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 causes environmental problems to our ecosystem.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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