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Band 7.5

One of your friends in a foreign country is starting an import-export business, and he has asked you to recommend a product from your country to him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: say what product you want to recommend to him tell him where he/she can get this product explain why you want to recommend this product

Dear Prabh, How are you ? I hope you are in radiant health. I received your letter for some suggestion of product in your new business of an import-export. As you know India is a hub of diverse goods. I want to recommend you start with Spices because they are getting popular in
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 product is easily available in the local market or to make it cost effective you can directly deal with the wholesale producer and export in bulk.
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, I can set up a meeting for you in advance if you are interested in continuing with the idea. The reason why I personally wanted to suggest spices is the increasing demand in different countries. As you live in Canada you know how people are inclined towards the taste of food and the traditional ways to make it healthy and tasty at the same time with the herbs and numerous spices invented in ancient times. You Should think about my recommendations and reply back for other questions. Warm Regards, Harshit

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Consider providing more specific examples or data to strengthen your recommendation. For instance, mention a particular spice that is in high demand or a specific wholesaler you recommend.
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Ensure to maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter. The phrase 'As you know India is a hub of diverse goods' could flow better with a slight rephrasing, such as 'As you know, India is renowned for its diverse range of goods.'
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Work on improving sentence structure and syntax for a smoother read. For example, instead of 'Also, I can set up a meeting for you in advance if you are interested in continuing with the idea,' consider 'Additionally, if you're interested in this idea, I can set up a meeting for you in advance.'
task achievement
Your letter covers all the required elements: recommending a product, explaining where to get it, and justifying your recommendation.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion of your letter are clear and friendly, setting a positive tone for the correspondence.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a distinct point, which helps in maintaining clarity and coherence throughout the letter.
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