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It is believed that schools should focus more on practical skills than theory. How far do you agree? Why?

#schools #focus #skills #theory
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Education
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 plays a vital role in building up the successful career of a child. It is a common belief that the
education
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 system in our country gives more attention to learning theories
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 of motivating
students
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 for practical
knowledge
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. I completely agree with
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 statement and in
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 essay, I will support my opinion with examples.
To begin
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 with, the
education
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 format of each and every board is common and they want
students
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 to learn a bookish language
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 of implementing it into real life.
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, while doing accountancy we focus on normal formulas and procedures of how to make financial accounts but in ,reality
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 do not know how these accounts are prepared in the corporate world. If
education
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 is seriously linked with a career
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 it should be planned with practical
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. Another reason lies with tertiary
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 where
students
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 study human resources ,
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, they learn about the procedure of taking an interview of a candidate which is far away different from that interview being held in a practical world.
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,
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 are unable to cope with the companies when they start their careers and have to learn from scratch.
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, there is an argument that the
education
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 system
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 focus on practical things
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 when
students
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 are learning about computer
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 .
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, it is more practical terms that help them to learn MS office in a better way. To conclude, some people believe that
students
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 devote maximum time of their schooling to learning theories than focusing on enhancing their practical
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. I believe that it is happening because of the outdated
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 system which needs to be modified so that
students
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 can make
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career
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 in future.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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