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In the last century, the first man to walk on the moon said it was "a giant leap for mankind”. However, some people think it has made little difference to our daily lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Undeniably, there has been big progress in
space
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explorations
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. The
first
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 man who walked on the moon in the twenty century said, "It was a giant leap for mankind", implying knowing more about the universe would lead
people
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 to the
next
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 level.
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, in my perspective, the drawbacks caused by
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explorations
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 outweigh the minimal progress.
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 of all, there are many things that
people
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 have to concentrate on more and spend
money
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 on rather than
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explorations
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. Many nations and companies invest enormous
money
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 in the
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 business,
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 there are so many
problems
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 on the
Earth
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 at the moment.
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, a lot of
people
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 who live in
countries
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 in Africa are suffering from poor nutrition. Poor
countries
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 do not have good housing, healthcare, education systems yet. In
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 situation, it is ironic that developed
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 spend huge
money
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 that poor
countries
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 really want to solve their
countries
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problems
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 that are directly relevant. I reckon government and nations should try to make a better
Earth
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 and make all the
people
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 on
Earth
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 live well. Of course, there are benefits and advantages from
space
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explorations
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. Since extremely high technologies are needed to launch a rocket or a spaceship,
people
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 could have developed the quality of aeroplanes.
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, we could have known more about the
earth
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,
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 as the reason why the earthquakes happen.
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, these kinds of benefits are less important to make a better
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. To sum up, I reckon that
people
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 should spend more
money
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 solving the
problems
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 on
Earth
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 than knowing about outer
space
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 since there are already enormous unsolved and immediate
problems
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 on
Earth
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.
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