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Home Schooling has become very popular in recent years. However, most people still believe that attending schools is the best way to obtain formal education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of home-schooling?

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Nowadays it is observed that a new trend of home-schooling started to be practised by some many parents.
On the other hand
, there are people that think it is not a good idea to obtain a solid education. The following paragraphs take a look at both sides of the argument.
Firstly
, some advantages of home-schooling can be found. One of them
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is the opportunity to organize the time and the subjects considering
children
 needs.
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 means that
children
 can learn at their own pace because the program has been modified based on their interests and learning styles.
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this
 kind of approach could be more suitable for
children
 with disabilities or special needs.
Furthermore
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 environment can be provided for the child, where there are no dangers of being
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 or badly influenced by other pupils.
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 the other hand, there are
also
 negative aspects to
this
 new trend. To start with, the
children
 will miss the vital aspect of
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 which is socialization with other
children
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 the same age. Interacting with their peers is essential to develop all sorts of skills like
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problem- solving
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 and leadership, all of which are important for
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future professional life.
In addition
, no matter how much effort parents can put into making the home resemble the school environment, they will never be able to match the resources and extra-curricular activities that are available in schools,
such
 as musical instruments, gyms or
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 of which allow students to discover their talents and passions. To sum up, it is evident that home-schooling can be beneficial for some
children
 but considering
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 limitations, parents should analyze all aspects before deciding how to educate their
children
.
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