Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination,while other think that tere are more important factors such as money and appearance.Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Several representatives of contemporary society deem that various achievements are reached by intensive and hard work
whereas
others argue with Linking Words
this
position and claim that riches and appearance play an essential part in human life. From my perspective, it can not be denied that these statements are composed of a fraction of the truth. Linking Words
Therefore
, I am going to reflect on Linking Words
this
essay my own view of Linking Words
such
an issue and Linking Words
to
provide strong arguments, which confirm my core opinion.
On the one hand, being hardworking is a beneficial quality of a personality. Fix the infinitive
apply
Moreover
, owing to intensive work or study a person can reach a plethora of achievements. Linking Words
For instance
, if a juvenile Linking Words
will spend
a lot of time Wrong verb form
spends
on
the learning process, he can enrol in a desirable university or win a scholarship, which provides him with the possibility to get a valuable education. Change preposition
in
Likewise
, if an employee Linking Words
will work
with enthusiasm, Wrong verb form
works
participate
in various business meetings, Correct subject-verb agreement
participates
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and receive
receive
multiple awards, he can climb the career ladder extremely fast. Correct subject-verb agreement
receives
Hence
, his accomplishment is achieved by means of his Linking Words
hardworking
and desire to be more than an ordinary employee. From my point of view, the listed above arguments reflect immensely the notion of success.
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hard work
On the other hand
, several people allege that a successful person is a person with wealth or an attractive appearance. Linking Words
Furthermore
, they contend that Linking Words
hardworking
does not exert a substantial impact on fortune. As far as I am concerned, one of the main reasons why they claim Correct word choice
hard work
such
consists of envy. Indeed, the vast majority of the population contemplate that famous people, who reach a plethora of breakthroughs throughout their Linking Words
life
, do not Fix the agreement mistake
lives
extremely
labour. Rephrase
apply
However
, it would be unfair Linking Words
not to mention
the fact that numerous opulent people have been working a lot in order to become wealthy and famous. Linking Words
Besides
, it is difficult to create an outstanding composition or performance and actors and singers make an effort to glorify themselves. Linking Words
Also
noteworthy Linking Words
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that
is right that money and attraction exert a significant influence. Add a missing verb
is that
Nevertheless
, success can not exist without perseverance and diligence. Linking Words
Consequently
, a human, who wants to be wealthy, should endeavour hard.
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To sum up
, I would stress that having made these points, it is true that Linking Words
such
a tendency incurs criticism. Linking Words
Nonetheless
, only persons must decide Linking Words
upon
for themselves, what Change preposition
apply
does
success Unnecessary verb
apply
mean
for them. In my opinion, if riches are used for the right purposes, their benefits outweigh their drawbacks undoubtedly.Correct subject-verb agreement
means
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