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advantages and disadvantages of living in small communities

#communities
Over the
last
 two or three decades, mankind
have
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 been moving from small
communities
 to
the
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 broad society due to
industrial
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 revolution.
This
 kind of living in
a small
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a small community
small communities
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communities
 has more benefits and drawbacks.
This
 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. There are numerous advantages of staying in
a tiny
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a tiny society
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societies
. One of the major benefits is that humankind can get a multitude
help
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 from other
persons
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 because they always like to assist
to
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other people who really want
a
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aid. Another advantage is that maintaining a good relationship between all
communities
 residents
like
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 a brotherhood,
therefore
, they cannot suffer any kind of mental disorder
such
 as stress and depression.
For example
, Indians are living in
a
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different parts of
a tiny
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a tiny society
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societies
,
therefore
, they can be happy and get numerous aid from their
communities
 namely education
scholarship
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scholarships
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, free medical
checkup
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checkups
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.
Therefore
, living in
a tiny
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a tiny society
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societies
 has countless advantages. There are some drawbacks of staying in
a small groups
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small groups
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. One of the major disadvantages is that some humankind
take
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 over
advantage
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to
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 other's personal life because they have a right to control
of
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their group members,
thus
, lack of privacy between a person and
community
counselor
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. Another drawback is that people who are living in a small
community
 cannot get all the ultra-modern amenities due to living in
a small
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small societies
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societies
,
thus
, they have a minimum amount of wisdom about knowledge and education too.
For instance
,
in
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Sri Lanka has a plethora of
community
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 for the population staying whether small or large, but countless people still now live under
control
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 of
small
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community
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communities
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,
as a result
, the public cannot express
to
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their voice towards the ruling party.
Hence
, staying in a tiny
community
 has some
dusadvantages
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disadvantages
. To conclude, living in a small society gives enormous benefits as well as drawbacks too; getting enormous help from others and being
a
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happy life is the merits of
this
 tendency; lack of privacy, cannot use all the amenities is the demerits of
this
 trend.
Therefore
, I think
this
 trend has more advantages than disadvantages, I hope
this
 process is conducive to building a happy society.
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