It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history Do you agree or disagree?

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education. I totally disagree, with the idea that learning only local
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has more advantages than studying
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benefits it brings
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and having an advantage for their future
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Foreign
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worldview. Studying the
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, they can learn to accept divergent cultures and customs that exist, making life more interesting.
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, it would be wrong to neglect the learning of
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about foreign countries.
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who have some data about other countries'
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, can easily find a better job from the place that they well know and want to live. In conclusion, as the two analyzed reasons above, I strongly disagree with the idea that only
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • heritage
  • cultural identity
  • ancestry
  • traditions
  • globalization
  • empathy
  • contemporary issues
  • integrate
  • perspective
  • civilization
  • diversity
  • innovations
  • historical significance
  • nationalism
  • cosmopolitanism
  • historiography
  • geopolitical
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