Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend, and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

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The
number of
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crime
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rate is increasing in many countries among adolescents.
Crime
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is one of the main
subject
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subjects

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that we
worried
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are worried

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about.
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This
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origins of
this
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situation seem to stem from two factors, with several remedies
appear
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appearing

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to be open to us. Perhaps the major factor is related to
unemployment
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an unemployment
the unemployment

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rate of young adults. Jobless
people
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may become involved in
crime
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us
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as

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means
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a means

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to get
money
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. A study has confirmed that at least 60% of young criminals are unemployed. If they had enough
money
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to buy daily
need
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things, they would not commit a
crime
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.
Second
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The second

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cause may be
safe
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the safe

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storage of
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Use synonyms

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gun
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guns

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in
home
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the home

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. Nowadays, Many families keep a
gun
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their
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in their

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house
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houses

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.It increases
risk
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the risk

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of unintentional and mass
school
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shootings.
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Linking Words

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

Last
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The last

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example is
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school
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a school
the school

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shooting
in
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at

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Oxford
high
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High School

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school
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, 15 years old boy,
who
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killed seven students
by
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with

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father’s
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his father’s

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handgun. The
gun
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is unlocked at home.
Third
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The third

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factor may be
drop
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dropping

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out of
school
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. Schools aim to teach young
people
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moral values
such
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as

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tolerance and sharing. It helps to reduce
crime
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commit
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committed

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. Turning to possible solutions , the biggest step would be
provide
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to provide

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vocational
course
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courses

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and retraining for young
people
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who have no job. It may
be prevent
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prevent

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crime
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the crime
a crime

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of
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or

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problem
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problems

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of
money
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them
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.
Furthermore
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, If you decide to keep guns in your home, be aware that many studies show that teaching children about
gun
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safety and use. It is not enough
to
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apply

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that,
government
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the government

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need
control
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to control

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gun
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law. In conclusion, It appears
to
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that

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be main causes of
adolescents
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adolescent

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crime
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is
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are

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lack of work,
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gun’s
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gun

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safety use and education. Governments,
parents
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and parents

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should encourage their young
people
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to
educate
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be educated

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. Education gives
people
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knowledge and skills. They can earn enough
money
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to live happily with their job.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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