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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
It is argued that all
cars
 that run on fuels should be banned and electric
cars
 should be used
instead
 of oils
cars
. I totally agree with the statement because there can decrease the level of carbon monoxide in the
air
 and there will be less
noise
pollution
.In the coming paragraphs, I shall propound my view on the statement. There is no doubt that automobiles have an important role in today’s era. It is a need of an hour to commute but at the same ,time one can deny
this
 it causes a lot of
air
pollution
. A new
car
 creates less
pollution
 but once it started getting old it releases a lot of carbon monoxide which results in a decrease in oxygen content in the
air
 which leads to numerous health hazards like respiratory illness etc. Petrol
engines
 are less destructive than diesel
engines
 but both are responsible for
air
pollution
. No doubt, the automobile industry has improved a lot in terms of more efficient
engines
 ,
still
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 they create
noise
.
Car
 pollutants cause immediate and long term effects on the environment.
Car
 exhausts emit a wide range of gases and solid matter, causing global warming, acid rain and harming the environment and human health.
Car
, trucks and other forms of transportation are a major cause of bad
air
 quality in Delhi and was declared by
air
 quality control.
On the other hand
, Electric
cars
 do not create
air
pollution
 and
noise
pollution
 and are better for the environment.These
engines
 are made up of electric motors, using energy stored in batteries and thereby there is no internal combustion engine that causes
air
pollution
.Compared to internal Combustion diesel or petrol engine electric
cars
 does not create
noise
,
thus
 reducing
noise
pollution
. Countries like Newzealand and Cannada have a good quality of
air
 as people commute there by means of electric vehicles. In conclusion, I totally agree with the statement that electric
cars
 should be used
instead
 of burning fossil fuel
cars
 as they are environmentally friendly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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