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The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Technology
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 is expanding every single day. Nowadays, without the
internet
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, we cannot imagine our lives. A
lot
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 of
people
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 enter their personal
details
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 on different websites with different objectives. Uploading personal
information
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 on the
internet
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 is common and there are a
lot
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 of benefits as well as huge drawbacks of
this
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 action. In the current
technology
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 world, almost everyone uses the
internet
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 for different purposes, some
people
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 are using it for work, social media, studies or even job search objectives. Almost for all the purposes,
users
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 have to enter their personal
information
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 on different
companies
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 websites.
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,
people
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 upload their educational
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, skills and contact
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 on LinkedIn to explore good job opportunities. Some
people
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 provide credit card
details
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, because of some online shopping payments. Some
users
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 upload general personal
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 like pictures, ages or gender for social media applications.
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, sometimes
users
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 provide their home address for home delivery of their food or shopping.
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, there are huge benefits to sharing personal data with big
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companies
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,
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, there are too many drawbacks as well.
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, if any big
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 company loses
these
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 personal
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 of individuals or their credit card
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 due to some hacking attack
then
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users
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 face critical consciences. There are a
lot
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 of reports available on the
internet
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 which shows, a
lot
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 of individuals are the victim of these
internet
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 hacking or vulnerability. In conclusion, sharing personal
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 with
internet
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companies
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 to some extent is fine, but before sharing, we have to make sure that the company is reliable,
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 try to avoid saving credit card
information
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 on
companies
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 websites.
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