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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss the view and give your own opinion.

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Over the world, people are categorised by their eating habits into vegetarian,vegan and non-vegetarian according to the food they prefer to eat and they can freely move in any category by their own virtue.Those who prefer not to eat
meat
 or
fish
 ,think that it is good for their
health
 as well as for the environment, in the
next
 paragraphs will elaborate on
this
 topic in detail but,
personally
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 I think the above-mentioned statement is true.
Firstly
 , eating
fish
 and
meat
 is giving a boost to fishing and
meat
 industries where raising and killing of an animal for food purposes is business,but it is costly for the environment as,from one scientific research, during lifetime one animal uses an average of 22000 litres of water and excretes tons of methane gas in the atmosphere and in the end we can get 40-60 kgs of
meat
 which is harmful to the environment.
On the other hand
,plants or trees during their lifespan produces a large quantity of oxygen for nature and absorb double the greenhouse gases from the atmosphere and growing plants and trees use less water comparatively. Fishing and hunting animals work negatively on the sea ecosystem and animal -kingdom as it pushes some animal and
fish
 species to the edge of extinction or vanishes them away at all,disturbing the flora and fauna on the earth and in the sea.
Moreover
, eating
meat
 brings some diseases like 'prion' disease which is related to red
meat
.
Additionally
 eating
meat
 is not good for cardiovascular
health
 as it affects cholesterol levels.Diet without
meat
 and
fish
 is better for
health
 which is proven scientifically and a large number of people turning towards
such
 a diet. To sum up, I agree with the notion that diet excluding
meat
 and
fish
 is good for
health
 and
in addition
, eco-friendly or better for the world.
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