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Some people believe that it us best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or storage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there are two types of reactions when
people
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 face a bad
situation
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such
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 as having a bad job or storage of money. The
first
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 type is to accept them while the
second
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 type is to try and improve
this
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situation
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.
This
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 essay discusses both sides and will give my own opinion.
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 of all, some
people
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 think that it is the best way to accept the bad
situation
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, while
this
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 way has some negative impact. The most notable impact is stress. If
people
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 are always in a bad
situation
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 for a long time their minds will not be stable,
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 as having in bad mood, angry easily or even will get some mental sick. It is a bad habit that
people
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 accept all things without trying to
change
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this
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situation
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.
Therefore
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, other
people
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 hold that it is better to try and improve
such
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 bad situations. It is true that
this
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 is a positive thought, and because
people
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 have tried it to
change
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 their
situation
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, they won't feel regret. Even though sometimes it may not
change
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 a lot whereas
people
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 have tried to improve their life, they will feel satisfied.
As a result
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, they will be more easily accepting of their
situation
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.
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, if
people
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 don’t try to improve the
situation
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, the bad
situation
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 will never
change
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.
People
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 can try to do something that might
change
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 the
situation
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.
For example
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,
people
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 who are unsatisfactory to the job can try to talk with the manager and ask to
change
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 their position or ask some suggest solving these problems. In conclusion, I think that
people
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 should try to improve their bad situations rather than just accept them and do nothing. Due to having some action to
change
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 the
situation
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people
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 will be satisfied and might have a chance to
change
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 their
situation
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. If
people
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 don’t do anything the
situation
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 will not be changed.
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