Working long hours causes a great deal of stress and can be very bad for one's health. VinMec’s top management must find a way to reduce this type of stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Medial staffs, who are not only in Vinmec Hospital but
also
in all other hospital
in the world, always all face Change the wording
hospitals
to
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apply
stress
in the workplace, therefore
, I agree with the statement that VinMec's top managers need to help their staffs
by finding a way to reduce Fix the agreement mistake
staff
stress
after long
time working at the hospital because of two reasons.
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a long
First
and foremost, when doctors or nurses works
long hours in Change the verb form
work
stressful
environment, most of them would lower their working ability Add an article
a stressful
as a result
of being tired and feeling stressful
. We can not do Replace the word
stressed
by
our best when we are not in the best state of our health. Change preposition
apply
For example
, after a long and difficult surgery, the only thing I want is rest and relaxation, which helps me to recover my energy, concentration, and, interest in working. I can not focus on my work if I lack of
sleep or feel not well. Remove the preposition
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Stress
will reduce everyone's working ability.
The second
reason is that when a medical staff gets stress
, his/her negative feelings will transfer to patients, who need positive feelings to struggle to illness and recover their health. Wrong verb form
stressed
This
will affect to quality
of medical care in the hospital. Add an article
the quality
For instance
, my friend Nang Vo had an urgent 6 hour
lasted-surgery at night two weeks before, Add a hyphen
6-hour
however
, he still worked in the outpatient department in
the Change preposition
apply
next
day. When a patient needed to ask some questions more about his disease although
he had explained to
him for 30 minutes, he felt crazy and say Correct pronoun usage
it to
loud
to the patient. The consequence of Correct your spelling
aloud
this
is the patient went to other
hospital but Correct quantifier usage
another
not
keep treating in our hospital. Add a missing verb
did not
Hospital
environment should be Correct article usage
The hospital
the
place where Correct article usage
a
envolve
Correct your spelling
involve
possitive
feelings.
In conclusion, I definitely agree thatCorrect your spelling
positive
,
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apply
stress
will be reduced as much as possible in the hospital setting and managers of Vinmec hospital should find a way to do this
because of following
reasons Correct article usage
the following
which
presented above.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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