Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and and give your own opinion.

Many people in leadership believe that economic development should be the most crucial goal, while others argue that there are
also
other things as important as
this
for a nation. In my opinion, I believe that if a country is rich, is the result of other factors. Of ,course it is vital for the operation and prosperity of a country, but
this
achievement came from the profound development of education. A clear illustration of
this
could be said to be, recent research by leading professors at a university in Greece has shown that countries with
higher
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proportion of educated
citizens
have higher possibilities to increase their GDP growth.
This
is because master degrees or PhDs have the tendency to create many innovative
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up
companies
which
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have a pivotal role
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the
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economic development.
For instance
,
companies
like Apple and Microsoft
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up from the ideas of two brilliant people, Steve Jobs and Bill Gates respectively.
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multinational
companies
nowadays lead the world`s technological features and the economy as well. Apart from that, they are
also
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beneficial
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both for the USA and the
citizens
, because they
are offer
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many career prospects and they are
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billions of dollars every year in taxes.
On the other hand
, many countries like China or India do not pay attention
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the quality of their citizen`s life. They are progressing all these years due to the cheap workforce they offer to multinational
companies
. As nations, may have huge economic power and dominate the world in many aspects
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the vast majority of their
citizens
are unhappy on a variety of grounds like poverty and
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educational system. To sum up, I have the belief that the priority of a country should be its
citizens
and how to improve the quality of life.
Then
this
will have
as a result
the prosperity of society.
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