Some people say that the best way to improve Vinsers’ health is by increasing the number of sports facilities at VinGroup/Vinhomes. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health at those sites and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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some sports facilities at

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