Some people say that all secondary school students should be taught how to manage money as it is important life skill

According to some individuals,
wealth
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of
as
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person plays an indispensable role in their
life
and how to spend
money
according to their needs .therfore,it
have
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to be taught in children's academic
life
.According to my perception,
Iam
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I am
in the favour of
this
phenomenon.
To begin
with, undoubtedly,just as time
management
is necessary
in
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everyone's
life
,
money
management
is
also
crucial.The reason behind
this
that
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individuals expend their
money
on some bad activities because they do not know how to invest
on
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unnecessary things
such
as
kasino
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casino
games .
For instance
,according to a survey by Oxford University,it can be seen that many
business
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businessman
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man
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men
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spends their
money
on
such
games and they get failed by their bad luck .
As a result
, they
loss
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their all profits .So ,it should important to teach students
money
management
in secondary schools.
Furthermore
, budget plays a vital role in people's
life
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as
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where they spend on them.It is true that
one time
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investment in
a
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good things
work
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as
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a
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long term.If learners train about how to manage
money
,it will give them
fruitfull
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fruitful
outcomes and change their living standard.
For example
, if a person
save
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their
money
as Fd or
by
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any other way .it will help him in future problems. To conclude,
although
students learn many subjects and skills in schools ,but
money
management
skills are
also
usefull
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useful
for them through
one time
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investment and save
money
. And it
have
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great
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impact on individuals lifestyle.
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