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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human’s life. Discuss both views and give your opinion – Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that learning from past
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history
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 is important in avoiding repeating the previous
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while
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taking
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making
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decisions
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on
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 our
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today
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 paper will investigate two different arguments, where one argues that we can’t learn from previous
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history
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take
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make
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 better
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today
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 the other one believes that
history
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 is an essential source of
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 to comprehend
human’s
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 life. Eventually, I will draw my own conclusion
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 As for the first argument, some
people
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 believe that
history
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 can’t provide us with useful
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 to
take
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make
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 better
decisions
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 nowadays. The main claim provided to support
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 claim is that these days the world is globalized and faces different kinds of
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climate
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change
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,
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 the
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 in the past do not exist
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. To illustrate,
climate
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change
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 is a modern phenomenon that requires new policies and new actions, and since
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climate
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change
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 did not exist in the past
people
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 will not be able to learn from previous
challenges
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 in
history
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 how to mitigate the
climate
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change
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 problem nowadays. In terms of the second argument, there are
people
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 who believe that
history
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 can actually be a useful source of
information
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.
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 is because the previous wrong
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 in
history
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 can help us
in taking
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 better
decisions
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today
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 by avoiding repeating the previous
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. In other words, in the
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 there have been a lot of wrong practices concerning
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human rights
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 as race discrimination and gender discrimination.
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 in the past used to treat African
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 as slaves.
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, women were not guaranteed equal rights as men.
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, when
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 learn about the problems behind these negative practices, they will take new actions to avoid previous
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. In conclusion, though the
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 we face
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 are different than the
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 in the past, governments can use
history
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 as a source of
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 to avoid repeating
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past
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 in the future.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lessons
  • mistakes
  • insights
  • human behavior
  • cultural diversity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • distorted
  • present-focused
  • personal development
  • societal development
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