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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I had a flight from Paris to London on the 13th of February (identification number is AL-303). I had a terrible migraine, and because of it I didn't think straight and left my bag in the cabin. I noticed my mistake only when I was already at the hotel. It is a small red handbag with a gold zipper, it has one pocket inside, a striped handle, and a big gold "S". If I remember correctly, my purse contains: medications, one silver necklace, one silver ring, and my driver's license. I would appreciate your help in getting my bag back. I would like to check if it was found and what is the procedure to claim it.
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, I need the "Lost and Found" department's contact information, it would be great
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 if you could provide it. If it is possible to send my item to the hotel, I would be really grateful.
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, I could go to the airport and get my handbag in person. I would appreciate receiving your response as soon as possible, as I have a flight back to Paris in a week. Thank you in advance. Best Regards, Antanina.

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task achievement
Ensure that all parts of the task are covered and that details are relevant and clear.
task achievement
Consider enhancing the formal tone slightly more to suit a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
Maintain logical flow; the letter already flows well, but ensure no abrupt transitions.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task, providing a clear description of the situation, the bag and its contents, and a request for assistance.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure is logical and easy to follow, with distinct paragraphs focusing on specific points.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate and courteous, fitting a formal letter format.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Airliner, oversight, misplaced, personal belongings, valuable items, sentimental significance, luggage retrieval, lost and found, passenger service, tracking, compensate, verification of ownership, promptly, inconvenience, coordinate, verify, transparent communication
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