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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Cooking skills and knowledge about the products you are eating considering important for starting adult life. Even so, should
school
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 teach cooking, healthy eating habits or it will just steal time from main academic subjects?
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 both points of
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view
 before I provide my personal opinion. It is clear, that
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 hard to stay on a healthy diet in our times. Learning to cook your own meal, count calories and choose
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 ingredients will help children set up good habits and be more
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conscious
 about their food. It will not only improve individual health but might improve statistics of obesity and eating disorders. I my opinion,
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 of the right diet can not be overrated
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, considering
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 of chronic
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diseases
 and early heart problems.
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, not everyone
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 with
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. In most schools
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 is already full,
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especially
 in middle and high
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. All the more so, significant numbers of pupils have extra classes or
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 clubs. The hardest time is the
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year
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 of high
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 when
teenaders
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teenagers
 must think not only about their
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applications
 to colleges
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 but
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full
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 list of
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 exams. In
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environment
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, suggestions of any additional classes may be seen as unrealistic and even insensitive to students.
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, in my eyes, younger students can benefit from
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 training. In conclusion, educational
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 are often difficult and tend to bring controversy. I think, the best time to teach kids food science is elementary and early middle
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 because there
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 enough place in the timetable,
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 food-related activities can be a part of biology, science or ecology courses.
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