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My name is Suchaya Boonviriya, my educational backgrounds are a bachelor’s degree in nursing science and a master’s degree in public
health
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. I have worked as a neurological ICU nurse for 7 years at Bangkok Hospital,
Thailand
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and have experience in various
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areas
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as aged
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, private
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, and medical equipment in Australia. At present, I am working at Telehealth Cluster, Faculty of Medicine, Chulalongkorn University,
Thailand
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where I conduct digital innovations as tools to leverage the power of data to enhance
healthcare
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service and enable a higher quality of
care
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. While I have worked at Telehealth Cluster, I have
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been a participant in a few national public
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projects
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as A nationwide survey and development of digital innovation for facilitating HBV elimination in
Thailand
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, Nationwide Online HCV Registration and be in a team of developing hepatitis B and C practice guideline with Ministry of Public
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.
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, I have been part of innovative
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research
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as Artificial Intelligence in the diagnosis and prognosis of hepatocellular carcinoma, developing a digital platform for primary and secondary prevention in the elderly that integrate
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and environmental factors between community and
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facilities for a seamless multidisciplinary
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plan.
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, I still require bridge knowledge between medical and engineering which play a major role in digital
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innovation toward
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’s betterment.
Thailand
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is one of the developing countries where
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disparities, whether caused by socioeconomic status or geographically, are associated with worse
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outcomes,
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eliminating
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care
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inequalities must be done. To realize
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a goal, I competed and was awarded HRH Princess Chulabhorn, College of Medical Science Scholarship in Commemoration of King Bhumibol Adulyadej’s 90th Birthday Anniversary.
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prestigious scholarship provides an opportunity for me and other medical professionals in
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to enhance services and reach medical science accomplishments leading to improving the living quality of people.
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, I would like to have the opportunity to gather knowledge with your assigned work. I am strongly confident that I will be guided to be an expert along with my energy, dedication, willingness to learn and strong desire to be successful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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