More people today are overweight than ever before. What are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

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My name is Suchaya Boonviriya, my educational backgrounds are a bachelor’s degree in nursing science and a master’s degree in public

health

. I have worked as a neurological ICU nurse for 7 years at Bangkok Hospital,

Thailand

and have experience in various

healthcare

areas

such

as aged

care

, private

care

, and medical equipment in Australia. At present, I am working at Telehealth Cluster, Faculty of Medicine, Chulalongkorn University,

Thailand

where I conduct digital innovations as tools to leverage the power of data to enhance

healthcare

service and enable a higher quality of

care

. While I have worked at Telehealth Cluster, I have

also

been a participant in a few national public

health

projects

such

as A nationwide survey and development of digital innovation for facilitating HBV elimination in

Thailand

, Nationwide Online HCV Registration and be in a team of developing hepatitis B and C practice guideline with Ministry of Public

Health

Additionally

, I have been part of innovative

healthcare

research

such

as Artificial Intelligence in the diagnosis and prognosis of hepatocellular carcinoma, developing a digital platform for primary and secondary prevention in the elderly that integrate

health

and environmental factors between community and

health

facilities for a seamless multidisciplinary

care

plan.

However

, I still require bridge knowledge between medical and engineering which play a major role in digital

healthcare

innovation toward

healthcare

’s betterment.

Thailand

is one of the developing countries where

healthcare

disparities, whether caused by socioeconomic status or geographically, are associated with worse

health

outcomes,

thus

eliminating

health

care

inequalities must be done. To realize

such

a goal, I competed and was awarded HRH Princess Chulabhorn, College of Medical Science Scholarship in Commemoration of King Bhumibol Adulyadej’s 90th Birthday Anniversary.

This

prestigious scholarship provides an opportunity for me and other medical professionals in

Thailand

to enhance services and reach medical science accomplishments leading to improving the living quality of people.

Thus

, I would like to have the opportunity to gather knowledge with your assigned work. I am strongly confident that I will be guided to be an expert along with my energy, dedication, willingness to learn and strong desire to be successful.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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More people today are overweight than ever before. What are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

Include an introduction and conclusion

There days, many people like to watch live performances (such as shows or concerts) at home, either on TV or on a computer, instead of attending in person. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

Your organized flight has been canceled. Write a letter to the airline company. You should 1)Complain about the situation 2)Request what you need from them to make a travel insurance claim 3)Suggest what they should do in future situations

Nowadays a large amount of advertising is aimed at children. Some people think this can have negative effects on children and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services?

Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organization to continue their development. On the other hand, others think that practical aid or advice is more useful. Discuss both view and give your opinion.