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The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life.

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people
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 accept that the conventional ideas are a hindrance for
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 generation to live their lives while the elders in the society think that
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 should adhere to the old notions for the same course. In my opinion, I agree partially with the given statement.  
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 with, we consider elders as the backbone of a society. The culture, tradition or
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root of a community depend on their
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advice
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advice
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 and guidance. For
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instant, elders
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 keen to guide
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 generation  on how they should behave in a social get-
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 or how to socialize with others.
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, they play a vital role in depicting our cultural values and
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 ways to their youngsters.   
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, the thinking and living
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 generation
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 much more different than others.
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, they are dealing with
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 21st century
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 interlinked by social media and
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. There is a contrast
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 the lifestyle of youth and the ideology of older
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. Currently, it is important to prepare youngsters
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 the modern structure of living while keeping the aspect of culture in their mind. For
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instant, most elderly
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 do not advise
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internet
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, because it is considered as
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.
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, the youth has to have some knowledge about it, if they need to compete with the world. Adding to
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,  It will be much harder to accept all the teachings of senior
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.   To conclude, I agree partially because I believe that it is necessary to get senior citizens’ opinion in some
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 of life but not in every aspect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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