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countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same products anywhere.do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The issue of globalisation has grown
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 importance over
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 few decades.
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,
people
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 are able to purchase
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products
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 all around the
world
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. I believe it is a positive development for both customers and producers in the
world
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.
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 opportunity opens the door for the companies to have an equal chance to grow and sell their
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 in a
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worldwide
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world wide
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worldwide
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 radius which
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results in massive job opportunities for every country.
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,the Nike
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 decided to open their new factory in highly populated country of India many years ago so they can use enormous Human Resources as
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work force
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.
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 action was highly beneficial for both
people
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 and the
company
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 they were
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 help to
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 of unemployment which is a serious problem in
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 countries.
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, it was a huge success for the
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 in
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 of business because it helped them to enlarge the branches and produce more goods.
besides
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, the merits of
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 global market could be far more for the
people
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 who live all Around the
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.as we know it is a dream for every
company
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 to be known worldwide,to achieve
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 purpose and if they want to stay in
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 competition with other brands they have to make their
products
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 with higher qualities and with a reasonable price.
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, in the interest of
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 cause
people
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 will
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 with better
products
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. Frankly speaking,I think
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 why
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people
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 buy
same
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products
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 everywhere. in conclusion, due to the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that
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 is a positive development
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 result of better qualities that
turns
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people
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 into purchasing similar goods around the
world
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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