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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you thik these changes are positive or nagetive?

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There is no doubt that these days there has occurred
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 in the family structure. The question is, what are these changes and the problems resulting from them, and are they actually positive or negative? In
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 information and draw my own conclusion. There are important changes
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 occurred in the family structure.
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, nowadays
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parents
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work
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. To illustrate, in the past, it was mainly men who worked, but now women do different jobs as well.
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, men become more willing to do
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homework
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 as house cleaning and washing clothes.
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, since
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parents
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 are busy with their
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, there has been an increase in the demand for servants in the home to take care of children. The
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 changes have a lot of positives.
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parents
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 were working, a better quality of life can be provided for children.
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, when mothers
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,
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 will help to mitigate the burden on fathers. Feature the most vital is that exist women in different jobs removes any distinction between gender there existed in the past. As for the disadvantages, when
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parents
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work
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, kids may feel neglected and insecure, and
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 they might merge
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 negative activities. To illustrate,
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parents
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 do not have time for their kids if
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 of them
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, and the less attention they received from
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,
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 tendency to
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 illegal activities among children. In conclusion,
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the presence
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 of negative consequences caused by the change in the family structure, I believe that the advantages of
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 change outweigh the disadvantages.
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