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Nowadays many people work from home. Some think it is beneficial, while others think it may distract the family routine. What is your opinion.

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A great number of issues like depression and some other diseases are caused by great pressure. In
this
 essay, I will account for the reasons why
people
 would feel
stress
 in society nowadays with respect to
work
 and
study
, as well as vanity, and
then
 possible solutions related to entertainment will be given.
Firstly
, it is widely known that the competition in
work
 and
study
 has come more and more fierce these years. Confronting with a predicament in
work
 and
study
 would be very common in
people
’s careers and addressing them might be more than challenging.
This
 allows individuals to be prone to feel
stress
.
For example
, Google, a well-known international company in the world, requires the employees to be innovative, creative and productive. These employees may have heavy
stress
 to avoid being eliminated through the competition.
Secondly
, vanity,
a
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nature of human
being
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, might drive
people
 to show better than others and
consequently
, these
people
 may have to
work
 harder under severe strain. Some
people
 want to show their wealth in front of others, so they might purchase some luxurious bags or extravagant cars.
Nonetheless
, many of them are not so rich so
that
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they must save money and
work
 harder to support
his
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or
her
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 outlook.
This
, apparently, would generate
stress
. One plausible method to tackle
this
 problem is to construct entertainment space in every community by
government
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. It could be convenient for the employees and students to relax
themselves
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after
work
 and
study
.
This
 might be helpful for a great number of residents to relieve the
stress
 and erect a more glorious image of
government
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. To conclude, the fierce competition in
the
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modern society and the vanity of human nature would be responsible for
this
 issue and building entertainment space might be a reliable way to cope with it.
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