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Some people think that it is better for a country’s economy for people to spend money while others believe that it would be better for people to save money. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In
this
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 day and age, youngsters are likely to hold elders in less
respect
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 as opposed to the past. There are a plethora of factors behind
this
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 tendency alongside serious problems, which will be discussed below. To begin with,
this
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 negative development boils down to one main reason -
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 gap and the deficit of
time
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 for each other.
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, the huge disparity in thoughts, attitudes towards numerous issues in life between the young and the senior citizens could lead to conflicts and disruptions. A shining example of
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 trend may be the difference in opinions on technology, namely mobile . While adolescents maintain that mobile phones are an evitable part of our life, their
grandparents
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 strongly convict that mobile phones are mostly pointless and harmful to our health,
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subsequently
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 they fiercely oppose
to
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phone-using.
Grandparent’s
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 complaints and severe objections whenever seeing their kids using the phone, may annoy and
irratate
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irritate
 these youngsters. It is at
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 point that the age gap between these 2
generations
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 may have widened,
thus
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enable
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 disrespect to occur.
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, it is an era when young adults are totally slammed with work and their own
bussinesses
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businesses
 that they barely spare
time
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 for families, which can be clearly seen in the decline of family
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 these days when
grandparents
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 and grandchildren rarely eat together at the dinner table. Given the potentially disrespectful attitude mentioned above, what is needed is the
familiy
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family
 bonding
time
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, the
time
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 to talk, to empathize and sympathize, to understand each other, to
brigde
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bridge
 the emotional distance;
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, it is
such
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 a challenge for
millenials
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 to
acheive
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achieve
this
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 so-called family bonding
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 in recent years,
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 to
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the hectic
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 pace of their life. For
this
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 reason, seniors may get distinct feelings of less
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, less gratitude shown for them. Along with these aforementioned reasons come dire consequences, as on
familial
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a familial
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 and societal
scale
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scales
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. These young
generations
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, who are not able to exhibit
sufficent
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sufficient
respect
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 for their
grandparents
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,
may be
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 highly likely to fail to teach their descendants about family values.
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, the vicious circle of disrespect may continue unabated, from
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generations
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generation
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 to
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generations
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generation
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. Not only will
family
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the family
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 be negatively affected but
the
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society will
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 suffer from the consequence of disrespect in families. To clarify,
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children
childrens
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children
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 who do not treat their
grandparents
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 with proper
respect
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 may
also
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 display the same behaviours with seniors in the public.
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, moral degradation in
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soceity
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society
 as a whole is bound to happen. Overall, mainly because of
generational
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the generational
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 gap and
time
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 deficiency
that
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more and more disrespectful
attitude
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attitudes
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 are shown to the veterans,
consequently
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 leading to moral degradation in the society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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