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Band 3.5

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given table describes the information about the contribution of
women
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 in a higher position of management in three various enterprises namely Elden
Ltd
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,
Bamforth
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Ltd
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 and
Finsbury
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Ltd
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 from 1975 to 2015. Overall, the given final year three companies had the majority of
women
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 participating. According to the table illustrates, the initial period of a given table,
Finsbury
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Ltd
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 had the highest
women
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 participation in a senior management position, while in Eldan
Ltd
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 was the least. which is 16% and 3% respectively. The following year,
similarly
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,
Finsbury
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Ltd
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 was exceeded in
Bamforth
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Ltd
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, which is 14% and 11% respectively.
Similarly
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,
Finsbury
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Ltd
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 was higher than
Bamforth
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Ltd
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 of
women
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 support of higher position in management in 1985, which is 15% and 14% sequentially. To regard the statement,
in contrast
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, from 1990 to 2000, Eldan
Ltd
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women
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 were participated higher than other organisations. Surprisingly, in 2000,
Finsbury
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Ltd
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, attendance of
women
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 in the enterprise was reduced from 1990 to 2000, which is 22% to 20%.
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, in
Bamforth
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Ltd
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, from 2000 to 2015,
women
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 support had increased, which is 17% to 46%.

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