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Band 3.5

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given table describes the information about the contribution of
women
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 in higher positions in various three enterprises namely
Eldan
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, Bamforth and Finsbury
Ltd
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 from 1975 to 2015, units are measured in percentages and units are measured in percentage. Overall, in
th
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the
 given final
year
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, all three companies had more
women
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 participation than their previous years and
Eldan
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Ltd
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 had the highest. According to the table illustrates, in Finsbury
Ltd
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, the given initial period has the highest number of
women
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 support in senior management 16 per
cent
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, the following
year
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,
this
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 was reduced slightly 2% and surprisingly, in 1985, 1% was increased of ladies occupied in higher positions,
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, the
next
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year
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this
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 proportion was increased dramatically 7 per
cent
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,
in contrast
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, in 2000, there was a slight diminish, which is 20%, the final
year
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, 6% was raised. In
Eldan
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Ltd
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, from 1975 to 1980,
women
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 support in senior management of just 3%,
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, 1985,
this
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 proportion was raised, which is 14 per
cent
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, the
next
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year
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, the previous amount of
women
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 participation was increased double the amount, which is 28%. In 2015, over half amount of
women
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 occupied
Eldan
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Ltd
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, which is 64 per
cent
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.
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, Bamforth
Ltd
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, from 1975 to 2000,
women
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 attendance of senior organisations were increased just 2%, in the final
year
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,
women
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 were occupied just below half, which is 46%.

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