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Some people believe that all company decision should be taken by managers, whereas, others think it is better to include employees while decision making ? Discuss both points and give your opinion

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For the growth of a
company
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 it's a crucial factor to take right
decision
 every time by the
menebers
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members
 of the
company
. For
this
, some argue that it's just the
manager
 responsibility to
take
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make
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 the
decision
, while others believe that
decision
 should be taken
by
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with
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 the approval of all the employees of the
company
. In the essay, I will examine both sides and explain why I consider
decision
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took
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taken
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 by the approval of all employees is better than just by the
manager
. Those who believe that
manager
 is the only one to take
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a decision
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decision
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decisions
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have
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 two main arguments.
First
 of all,
this
 post is given to the most qualified
mamber
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member
tha
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the
company
,
therefore
, they should have enough
knowlegde
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knowledge
 to take
decision
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a decision
the decision
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 for the business. Another reason for taking managers as the only crucial part to take
decision
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a decision
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 is the level of experience they have in the field. As,
for example
, managers have more
experince
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experience
 than a quality control
offeicer
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officer
 or any other member of the organisation, the
decision
 making is
lot
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 easier and more dependable if it is taken by managers than any other member of the organisation. Others, on the
otherside
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other side
, maintain that
decision
 making works best if it is done by including all the employees of the business have two main reasons. It is always a tough
decision
 to take in a large
company
. If it is
large
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a large
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company
 like google or intel, just
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the manager
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manager
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managers
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 can never take
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a decision
the decision
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decision
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decisions
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 for the whole
company
 as they might not know what is going on in the organisation.
Additionally
, group
decision
 helps to lessen the burden on one person and
helps
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help
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 to divide the responsibilities between the workers that ultimately boost each member of the
company
. In conclusion,
manager
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the manager
a manager
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 can take the
decision
 of the
company
 if the
company
 is
small
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a small
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 business.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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