Today some person have to work far away from their family, what are the advantages or disadvantages?

Nowadays, many
people
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chose to work in other cities or
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very far away from their families. Personally, the advantages are making
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be
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person and learning distinct
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’ cultural. The disadvantages are
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become lonely or influence family’s
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, working far away from the family can
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people
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become
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independent
person
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. Living in other
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people
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have to do anything by themselves and learning life skills,
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find personal potential.
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,
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live without
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parent they must be address everything
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as cooking or clean-up
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, gaining distinct
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knowledge of
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People
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working in other
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will meet new friends and
learning
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theirs
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customs or
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culture.
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, there
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also
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have a
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reason
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for disadvantages. working in other cities long time influence
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miss
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family and friends. Some
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work in abroad city few months or years and never go back hometown,
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the network technology very common, but they can not seem each other in face to face,
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that perhaps effect
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feel lonely and got
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the problem
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of psychological.
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, the family’s relationship
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worse.
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,
people
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stay in other nation for work and have no chance to go back their country, so they may missing numerous family’s meeting or friends’ date,
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they can not keep in touch
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each other like before and they lost some relationship. In conclusion,
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the disadvantage brought the issues
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the advantages are countless value for our life that
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create life skills and discover personal potential.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...
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