Write a formal letter to your school director in which you suggest starting an Ancient Civilisations Club

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I have been a student of your school for the past seven years and I am writing

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letter to suggest some changes to your activity clubs. I understand that in your school there are only cycling and dancing clubs and nothing for the students who want to study more. My suggestion is to have an Ancient Civilizations Club for the children who love history.

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, extra-curricular activities would be extremely beneficial for the students.

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it is better for them to study something new

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than to stay outside or play computer games. Another benefit is the importance of understanding ancient civilizations. I hold a certificate in history and I really think

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immensely important to know about how ancient people lived.

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, participants of the club will not be so shy when they are accustomed to

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with others. One year ago I was employed as an instructor in

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club and I believe it will matter. I hope that I have been of some assistance to you. Please inform me if you make a decision

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question. Elena Borisova

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Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

184 words

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Write a formal letter to your school director in which you suggest starting an Ancient Civilisations Club

The Greeting

some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. others think that adult life brings more happiness ,in spite of greater responsibilites.

Some people prefer to live in hot climates. whereas others love the lifestyles in countries with cold climate. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Home schooling belongs to the past and is unacceptable in modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. However, it is longer the main form of transport. What are the reasons? What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population?