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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do you advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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The debate around whether the society that most of the masses are youth has positive or detrimental impacts on the
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 has raged on recently.
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 issue and provides some logical reasons before drawing a conclusion. In terms of possible drawbacks, probably the chief one is that the government has to provide adequate infrastructure in various filed
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 as education and work for the young.
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, they want to get married in the foreseeable future since some free or law prices accommodations should be considered for them.
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, the rate of crime will be increased if they do not have suitable policies for juveniles.
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, in Chine more than 55% of the population is 18 to 35 years old, the quantity of stealing is twice of other countries. Turning to the plus points, maybe the pinnacle merit is that the expert work-flow in those countries will increase noticeably since they can create an educated and prosperous
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 and in foreseeable future will become a superpower among other countries
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 as the UK, USA and Germany.
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, the government does not need to assign massively budget in the medical industry so that the tangible amount of their money will be spent for developing their
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. Having all into consideration, as far as I am concerned, the positive effects of having a youth population in a
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 outweigh the negatives as long as the government supplies the different prerequisites for their works, education and so on.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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  • innovation
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