Logging of the rain forests is a serious problem and it may lead to the extinction of animal life and human life. Do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that
deforestation
causes serious advantages which results
in Change the verb form
result
extinction
of animal and human life. I emphatically agree with that statement because Add an article
the extinction
rain
forests
keeps
our atmosphere in balance but Change the verb form
keep
also
they are refuge
for Add an article
a refuge
the
most of the rare species on our planet.
Correct article usage
apply
Rain
forests
are one of the greatest supplier
of Change to a plural noun
suppliers
the
oxygen for our globe. Correct article usage
apply
However
, due to the industrial revolution
we are facing global warming issues. Among others, it's caused by Add a comma
,revolution
the
Correct article usage
apply
deforestation
. Firstly
, harvest
wood is burned out in many factories to produce other resources. Wrong verb form
harvesting
Futhermore
, it's Correct your spelling
Furthermore
major
source of heating in our households. Add an article
a major
the major
This
leads to air pollution problem which is affecting our lungs and health in general. For example
, recent studies has
shown that Change the verb form
have
Correct your spelling
average
avarage
lungs age of middle age man in Tokyo is Correct article usage
the avarage
reletively
bigger than his present age.
It is commonly known that during logging of the Correct your spelling
relatively
rain
forests
veriety
of animals are losing their home. Correct your spelling
variety
Moreover
, many rare species have rapidly dissapeared
. Correct your spelling
disappeared
This
is because they can not adapt to the different, sometimes unfavorable
habitats. Change the spelling
unfavourable
For
example
animals rights defenders said that crocodiles from Amazonian Add a comma
,example
rain
forest
will Fix the agreement mistake
forests
dissapear
Correct your spelling
disappear
till
the end of 2050 if we would not change Change preposition
by
deforestation
behaviours.
In Conclusion, burning natural resources such
as processed wood leads to gases disproportion in the atmosphere and it will has
Change the verb form
have
a crucial consequences
on our future life as Correct the article-noun agreement
crucial consequences
a crucial consequence
a
human beings. More than that, Correct article usage
apply
deforestation
leads to extinction
of rare animals and their natural habitats. I strongly believe that we are facing critical Add an article
the extinction
circumtances
and we have to stop cutting the Correct your spelling
circumstances
forests
as soon as possible ,otherwise
we will be living in a different world without unique fauna and flora.Add a comma
,otherwise
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