Logging of the rain forests is a serious problem and it may lead to the extinction of animal life and human life. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that
deforestation
causes serious advantages which
results
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in
extinction
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of animal and human life. I emphatically agree with that statement because
rain
forests
keeps
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our atmosphere in balance but
also
they are
refuge
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for
the
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most of the rare species on our planet. 
Rain
forests
are one of the greatest
supplier
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of
the
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oxygen for our globe. 
However
, due to the industrial
revolution
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we are facing global warming issues. Among others, it's caused by
the
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deforestation
.
Firstly
,
harvest
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wood is burned out in many factories to produce other resources.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, it's
major
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source of heating in our households.
This
leads to air pollution problem which is affecting our lungs and health in general.
For example
, recent studies
has
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shown that
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average
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lungs age of middle age man in Tokyo is
reletively
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relatively
bigger than his present age. It is commonly known that during logging of the
rain
forests
veriety
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variety
of animals are losing their home.
Moreover
, many rare species have rapidly
dissapeared
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disappeared
.
This
is because they can not adapt to the different, sometimes
unfavorable
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habitats.
For
example
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animals rights defenders said that crocodiles from Amazonian
rain
forest
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will
dissapear
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disappear
till
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the end of 2050 if we would not change
deforestation
behaviours. In Conclusion, burning natural resources
such
as processed wood leads to gases disproportion in the atmosphere and it will
has
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a crucial consequences
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on our future life as
a
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human beings. More than that,
deforestation
leads to
extinction
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the extinction
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of rare animals and their natural habitats. I strongly believe that we are facing critical
circumtances
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circumstances
and we have to stop cutting the
forests
as soon as possible ,
otherwise
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we will be living in a different world without unique fauna and flora.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • carbon sink
  • global warming
  • indigenous tribes
  • livelihood
  • displacement
  • cultural erosion
  • soil erosion
  • water cycle
  • humidity levels
  • rainfall patterns
  • droughts
  • ecosystem services
  • pollination
  • climate change
  • logging
  • rain forests
  • habitats
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