Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
The number of people who prefer medicines and treatments rather than visiting doctors is increasing day to day. Obviously, it can be a misleading approach,
however
, there are some advantages Linking Words
such
as creating more and more natural and harmless medicines that do not include any chemicals. Linking Words
This
essay will discuss how Linking Words
this
phenomenon can develop modern medicine Linking Words
while
harming people's health.
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To begin
with, if a person takes medicines more than usual or does not add relevant things in the right proportions, it can lead to poisoning and even to an unfortunate death. Linking Words
Therefore
, as making treatments has always been difficult and worth anyone's life, it is quite significant to be mindful and so accurate during the process. Linking Words
For instance
, the number of people suffering from illnesses who died Linking Words
due to
not visiting doctors has risen by 20% in the Linking Words
last
decade.
Obviously, it is common for humans to explore Linking Words
this
world and find out new useful things just by trying and doing experiments. Unfortunately, the proportion of chemicals in modern drugs is rising and it would harm human organisms. Linking Words
Thus
, the appropriate way to solve it might be creating new mixtures of natural drugs, as they affect our bodies only positively and even cure faster. Linking Words
For example
, my grandma used to experience leg pain after she retired and decided to Linking Words
instead
of buying medicament advised by the doctor make medicament using leaves of different plants and a flower suggested by her neighbour. Surprisingly, she goes jogging every morning like in the past!
In conclusion, humans should not refuse doctors' advice because they are professionals and more experienced and even ask for help to create their own medicament. So, only by trusting professionals and doing everything wisely, modern medicine can improve.Linking Words
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