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Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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It is argued that nowadays it is extremely important to focus on farmlands, housing and industrial fields for humanity by some sort of community.
However
, others think
on the contrary
 way and argue that giving
lands
 for endangered
animals
 are more essential. I agree with both sides and give some evidence to the arguments in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, currently the humanity has huge demands to the farmlands or industrial fields
such
 as building houses, factories and others. Because with growing population and developing technologies all around the world, the demand to them have significantly increased simultaneously.
For instance
: if the number of people rise around the whole world, it means that the request to the accommodations and to the eatable products show the growth automatically.
In addition
, it is incredibly needed thing to give
lands
 for the type of public who want to make innovations in order to improve industrialism like with building rockets to observe other planets or with other purposes.
On the other hand
, it is really necessary to give
lands
 to the
animals
 who are under danger to disappear.
Firstly
, these species can be very helpful in producing variety types of drugs, exactly their smelling abilities.
For example
: if new drug is manufactured, observing their smelling can tell scientists whether
this
 drug is beneficial for its customers or dangerous.
Secondly
, endangered
animals
 are
such
 helpful in not only checking medicines but producing
such
 kind of them. The great example of
this
 will be an animal which lives in Indonesia that food that it eats helps entrepreneurs to make coffee really energetic. In my opinion, lending
lands
 to the housing and for the increasing of industrialism or to the type of species which are endangered has its advantageous and disadvantageous sides as mentioned. If it comes to me, offering earth to the new opportunities to invent is much better than the endangered
animals
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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