Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think corporal punishment is the most acceptable method to keep
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discipline.It may work to some extent but not always,
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think sometimes it must be approached in a different way
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behaviour correction by teachers and parents as an efficient way for a long time.Most young children tend to be disciplined due to the fear they might be whipped out if they violate any regulation.
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even been proven several times that the quality of education has enhanced as pupils were strictly oriented to study.If
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actions as smacking in some cases are not used against the violation , the other well behaved children may not look up to adults and look down on the principles like the other peers.
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am of the opinion that exerting continuous physical force on all children may bring about negative consequences.
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,when pupils get into puberty,they may be hesitant to freely express thoughts to others with fear of being rebuked or criticized by someone else.So it would be much better if adults used a method that positively
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.Namely,if a child does something wrong and it is explained politely by teachers or parents how their doings are disgraceful and disruptive to others,he may change his behaviour with embarrassment at what he has done.A good illustration for
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threw away my disobedience and bad behaviour at school with one kind explanation of a teacher,while so many teachers could not stop me by trying out with corporal punishment. To sum up, even though smacking is sometimes believed to be the most effective for the discipline,
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believe that it must be avoided in some cases.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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