In developing countries, rural children have less access to education.some people say that this problem is solved by providing teachers and schools. Other think that computer and internet should be provided. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

These days because of focusing only on learning at schools and spending too much time on electronic devices so . other people argue that

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have to

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for encouraging their

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to take regular

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while

believed that the majority accountability for promotion

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to do so should lie whit schools.I will discuss both perspectives and give my own idea

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with , it is generally believed that

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have more opportunities to share time whit their

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and teach their good habits . In many

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consider a roll module for their

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if the

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do what and

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the

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will

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repeat Or perform.

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have many tools to motivate and encourage their

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the

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.

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at home father can tell his

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if the

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will do physical exercises or participate variety

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related to the sport the father will buy a phone or bicycle and others. if the

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does not with these requirements

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may be punished and may even use force and

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has no right to beat

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and there is no or it can

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that less opportunity to

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.

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every pair of

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usually have one or two

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which means they can give enough care and attention to their

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's health while it is impossible at a

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with thousands of students.

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not all

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are available to spend too much time with their

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and have enough knowledge and

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for

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. To cite another example if the

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want to play football and he does not know the technique

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how to play and she is

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not an expert but the physical education teachers who teach at

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know home teaches the

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to play or do exercises correctly. There

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no conditions for the

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to do some exercises at home and the

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has

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and tools.

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Furthermore

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usually find it easier to keep

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at

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and sometimes are enthusiastic to take

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with their friends. To sum up I firmly believe that

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is both schools' and

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' responsibility to encourage

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to take

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regularly because it can give them more motivation and conditions to keep healthy