Most people prefer ready to eat food outside of their homes rather than home made food now.Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages.

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It is true that
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these days tend to eat more outside than at home. Some
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believe
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might get some disadvantages when they eat outside a lot. While I can understand
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view, I believe
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trend is acceptable for
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.  Admittedly, some serious issues can arise when
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eat meals outside.
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with,
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in modern society normally eat their meals in
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.
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, it is true that most
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' general goal is a commercial success, so those
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need rich flavour cuisines that can bring a large number of visitors.
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, the
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have to cook their
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with a lot of spices,
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salt and sugar and unhealthy cooking methods.
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, fried
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have very high calories because they are fried by oil, so those
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are surely harmful to
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's health.
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, I believe it is acceptable to eat
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outside. With the development of technology, many works had been automated, so
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have to improve their ability
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as computer programming to use the technologies well. In fact, ordering
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in
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use less time than homemade
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.
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, hamburger chain
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such
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as BurgerKing provides food to customers in 20 minutes.
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, if
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eat food in
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, they can save their hours,
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, the
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can spend more time on self-development rather than cooking meals.
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,
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can learn a wide range of skills.  In conclusion,
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might struggle with health problems when they eat outside too much, I strongly argue that
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can be beneficial by saving their time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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