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Most people prefer ready to eat food outside of their homes rather than home made food now.Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages.

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It is true that
people
 these days tend to eat more outside than at home. Some
people
 believe
people
 might get some disadvantages when they eat outside a lot. While I can understand
this
 view, I believe
this
 trend is acceptable for
people
.  Admittedly, some serious issues can arise when
people
 eat meals outside.
To begin
 with,
people
 in modern society normally eat their meals in
restaurants
.
However
, it is true that most
restaurants
' general goal is a commercial success, so those
restaurants
 need rich flavour cuisines that can bring a large number of visitors.
Consequently
, the
restaurants
 have to cook their
foods
 with a lot of spices,
for
instance
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 salt and sugar and unhealthy cooking methods.
For example
, fried
foods
 have very high calories because they are fried by oil, so those
foods
 are surely harmful to
people
's health.
However
, I believe it is acceptable to eat
foods
 outside. With the development of technology, many works had been automated, so
people
 have to improve their ability
such
 as computer programming to use the technologies well. In fact, ordering
foods
 in
restaurants
 use less time than homemade
foods
.
For example
, hamburger chain
restaurants
such
 as BurgerKing provides food to customers in 20 minutes.
Therefore
, if
people
 eat food in
restaurants
, they can save their hours,
therefore
, the
people
 can spend more time on self-development rather than cooking meals.
Consequently
,
people
 can learn a wide range of skills.  In conclusion,
although
people
 might struggle with health problems when they eat outside too much, I strongly argue that
people
 can be beneficial by saving their time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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