Some people think that parents should give their children complete freedom. Others feel that parents should limit their children’s freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that the
parents
need to give a right of freedom
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younger
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generation,I agree.
However
,others opine that
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parents
need to limit their time. In the essay,I will outline both sides and give
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opinion.
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the one hand,caregivers need to give a
choices
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of choosing right alternative because
this
can enhance a child to build
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confidence in whatever job they are doing.
For instance
,
toddler
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a toddler
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needs
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child initiated
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learning in building blocks, with
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teachers attention in the classroom.
This
develops
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attitude in completing the given task.
Secondly
,caregivers need to give their folks freedom of speech. To illustrate
this
, speaking up for themselves develops
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of the child.
Moreover
,elders need to trust their young ones because it can result
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good bonding between the
parents
and
children
.
Lastly
,some
parents
use abusive language towards their
children
.
This
will impact
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their
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behaviour of younger ones because they can easily grasp and utter words or sentences from their elders.
Furthermore
,
children
role model from their
parents
and use inappropriate language with others.
On the other hand
,others say that they need to limit the
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liberty,
otherwise
children
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to
depressed
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and are having some behavioural issues.
This
will impact
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children
brain development because of
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sensitive nature.
Moreover
,when caregivers are punishing or giving time-outs for their
children
.
This
can tend to
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aggressive nature,
Such
as traumas,sleep disorders or sometimes complaints of missing a person. In conclusion,
although
freedom is right for the younger generation. I believe that the
parents
need to understand and take care of their little
children
and respect their decision making.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom
  • independence
  • creativity
  • adulthood
  • risks
  • guidance
  • self-discipline
  • responsibility
  • restriction
  • development
  • decision-making
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