Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Environmental destruction has become one of the most pressing/ urgent/ alarming problems facing/ plaguing individuals and
countries
. However
, I believe it cannot be solved by any country alone and requires// calls for global cooperation/ collaboration due to the scale of the environmental impacts and the limited capacities of an individual country/ government.
Environmental preservation demands concerted/ collaborative efforts
/ actions of all countries
→ concerted efforts
/ actions on global
level// concerted global Correct article usage
a global
efforts
/ actions because the consequences of environmental damage affect the entire world
. Natural
environment is an interconnected system where each component/ element, ranging from air and soil to micro-organisms and human beings, Add an article
The natural
link
closely to each other. Change the form of the verb
linked
Therefore
, when one element is severely damaged, the global environment will deteriorate, resulting in/ causing/ inflicting worldwide pollution, biodiversity → ecosystem
degradation and climate change. Add a hyphen
biodiversity-ecosystem
For example
, tropical deforestation contributes to rise
in global temperature and change in Correct article usage
the rise
world
precipitation patterns, which have led to/ inflicted floods, tornados and droughts affecting many parts of the world
.
Furthermore
, without international coordination → cooperation/ collaboration, efforts
/ endeavors/ attempts to protect/ preserve the global environment cannot come to fruition/ be effective. Developing countries
are culpable/ responsible for a significant proportion of world
greenhouse gases emissions,
because they still heavily rely on fossil fuels as a main source of energy to develop the economy. If there is no international consensus on curbing global warming, the authorities of these Remove the comma
apply
countries
will neither be under pressure to wean their countries
off coal, oil and natural gas and switch to clean renewable energy,
nor will they gain technological, financial and other support from developing Remove the comma
apply
countries
to do so. Consequently
, no matter how much efforts
/Fix the agreement mistake
effort
endeavors
/Fix the agreement mistake
endeavor
attempts
other parts of the Fix the agreement mistake
attempt
worlds
make to tackle climate change, their Fix the agreement mistake
world
efforts
/ attempts will be futile// there
Replace the word
their
efforts
will be nullified/ negated/ countervailed/ neutralized.
In conclusion, countries
need to cooperate in order to tackle major environmental issues effectively because these issues inflict damage on the entire world
and are beyond the
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