Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Environmental destruction has become one of the most pressing/ urgent/ alarming problems facing/ plaguing individuals and
countries
.
However
, I believe it cannot be solved by any country alone and requires// calls for global cooperation/ collaboration due to the scale of the environmental impacts and the limited capacities of an individual country/ government. Environmental preservation demands concerted/ collaborative
efforts
/ actions of all
countries
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efforts
/ actions on
global
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a global
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level// concerted global
efforts
/ actions because the consequences of environmental damage affect the entire
world
.
Natural
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environment is an interconnected system where each component/ element, ranging from air and soil to micro-organisms and human beings,
link
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closely to each other.
Therefore
, when one element is severely damaged, the global environment will deteriorate, resulting in/ causing/ inflicting worldwide pollution,
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degradation and climate change.
For example
, tropical deforestation contributes to
rise
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the rise
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in global temperature and change in
world
precipitation patterns, which have led to/ inflicted floods, tornados and droughts affecting many parts of the
world
.
Furthermore
, without international coordination → cooperation/ collaboration,
efforts
/ endeavors/ attempts to protect/ preserve the global environment cannot come to fruition/ be effective. Developing
countries
are culpable/ responsible for a significant proportion of
world
greenhouse gases emissions
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because they still heavily rely on fossil fuels as a main source of energy to develop the economy. If there is no international consensus on curbing global warming, the authorities of these
countries
will neither be under pressure to wean their
countries
off coal, oil and natural gas and switch to clean renewable energy
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nor will they gain technological, financial and other support from developing
countries
to do so.
Consequently
, no matter how much
efforts
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/
endeavors
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endeavor
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/
attempts
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other parts of the
worlds
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make to tackle climate change, their
efforts
/ attempts will be futile//
there
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efforts
will be nullified/ negated/ countervailed/ neutralized. In conclusion,
countries
need to cooperate in order to tackle major environmental issues effectively because these issues inflict damage on the entire
world
and are beyond the capabilities of any individual government.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collective action
  • climate change
  • rising sea levels
  • extreme weather events
  • biodiversity loss
  • ecosystems
  • Convention on Biological Diversity
  • significant improvements
  • sovereignty
  • environmental policies
  • international collaboration
  • environmental degradation
  • shared responsibility
  • technological advances
  • innovative solutions
  • international cooperation
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