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Some people think it is one of the best ways to solve environmental problems by increasing the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, being environmentally friendly has become a popular issue due to global warming, greenhouse gas emissions, carbon emissions and so on. I believe that there are many means to solve these
problems
, while I disagree with the idea that the government should raise the
price
 of
fuel
 for all kinds of cars. There are some advantages to the government
increasing
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 the
price
 of oil.
Firstly
,
this
 is one of the most direct ways to prevent
people
 from driving their cars everywhere. Because the high
price
 should be afforded,
people
 should try to avoid spending on it.
Secondly
, the councillors may develop public transportation to encourage residents to take it.
This
 can reduce traffic jams and even narrowed the difference between urban and suburban.
Finally
, some
people
 may buy an electric car
instead
 of driving the traditional car.
On the other hand
, if councillors increase the
price
 of
fuel
 for vehicles, it will cause some
problems
 for
people
 who are not rich enough to afford the commuting expenditures. The outcome of increasing
fuel
price
 not only
effects
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 the residents’ life but
also
 bris huge stress for the public. The best way to solve the environmental
problems
 should be
raise
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 the environmental awareness of the public.
For example
, reduce the driving frequencies,
Thus
,
people
 will pay more green attention to their daily life. In conclusion, increasing the
price
 of
fuel
 for all vehicles is a practical way to solve environmental
problems
, while the most essential way is to promote environmental awareness to the public.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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