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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #money #railways #roads
Urbanization is changing the world, the attestation of how humanity has changed since 300,000 years ago. As places get urbanized, people flock together, in search
for
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opprtunities
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opportunities
, convenience and
much
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 better way of life. Urban growth
influence
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 transportation. Not only
it
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increases
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 the travel demand but
also
 causes , infrastructure pressure and traffic congestion. In
this
 essay, I will talk about the pros and cons of railways and
roads
 as well as their differences. Rail
transport
 is a means of transferring passengers and goods on wheeled vehicles running on
rails
, which are located on tracks. It's a greener option
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transport
 as it burns less fuel. Road
transport
on the other hand
 runs on a prepared flat surface. It's easier for tracking door to door cargo movement. Road
transport
 has limited speed due to road conditions and accidents, compared to rail
transport
 that has more considerable speed as tracks rarely
gets
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 disturbed.
Roads
 have limited capacity whereas railways have
huge
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 carrying capacity.
Roads
 are suitable for transporting goods in smaller quantities and
rails
 can
transport
 heavy goods in large quantities in
short
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 amount of time. According to the
transport
 Statistics conducted by the Department of Transportation in
United
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 Kingdom,
rails
 are much safer the
roads
transport
. As a whole, the positive effects of having
rails
 in a country outweighs its counterpart. Given the higher cost of building railways system, I totally agree that governments should spend more on it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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