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Children today spend more time watching television than they did in the past. Describe some of the advantages and disadvantages of television for children. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days many
children
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 spend more time watching cartoons on TV rather than
children
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 in the past. So because of that fact, there are some problems and benefits are appearing. Personally, I think that there are more
issues
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 than advantages. On the one hand,
children
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 who live in the present have a
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 of
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 with their health
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 as nervousness and overstimulation. They often fail to control their emotions and have emotional outbursts so their parents do not know how to solute these problems.
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, these
kids
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 have
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 with their eyesight which is why they have to wear glasses every day.
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, since I was six, I had watched TV a
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 until my mother brought me to an ophthalmologist who said that I had to wear glasses.
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,
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 who watch TV a
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 are more developed than
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 who lived before. These
children
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 watch a
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 of programmes about the environment and animals. Their brains absorb information better so these
children
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 can tell you more about the whole world than
kids
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 who lived in the past.
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, they know more about how to use modern technologies so it allows them to help adults to understand how to use devices and other technologies. In conclusion,
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 who are living now know a
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 of different and useful information
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 they have
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 with their mental health than
kids
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 who lived in the past.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational programs
  • diverse cultures
  • entertainment options
  • language skills
  • critical thinking
  • social awareness
  • shared experience
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • inappropriate content
  • academic performance
  • attention problems
  • social skills
  • commercial influence
  • addiction
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