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In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, one of the controversial topics that most of us are discussing is obesity and the unhealthiness of
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. Most of the time it is arguable that governments have to take responsibility for
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, I totally disagree with
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 statement and I am going to describe a few points behind my argument in my essay.
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,
children
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 are closer to their parents and they have to control their diet. Because of
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, adults can provide them with more healthy
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 on a daily basis, rather than junk
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 or
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 with other harmful preservatives.
For instance
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, we can see many television and YouTube advertisements
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that promote
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fast-
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fast food
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food
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 and unhealthy
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 items. By seeing these types of commercials
children
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 tend to ask for these types of diets from their parents.
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, adults can advise them of the harm that can occur by consuming these and guide them to proper diet habits from the infant stage.
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, guardians have to direct their
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 to do more physical activities
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 as running, swimming or Gymnastics which helps to get a better metabolic system. Most of the countries have
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children
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 parks and jogging or cycle tracks. Society can gain the advantage for the betterment of their
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's health.
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, these types of activities will help the mental health of the
child
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 since they can spend time with nature.
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, if
children
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 can be directed by the adults for exercise on a routine basis it will be beneficial for their future as well.
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, by going through the above points we can comprehend that, the predominant responsibility of
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 health depends on the adult's direction, but not within the government's hands.

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