In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, one of the controversial topics that most of us are discussing is obesity and the unhealthiness of
children
. Most of the time it is arguable that governments have to take responsibility for
this
.
In contrast
, I totally disagree with
this
statement and I am going to describe a few points behind my argument in my essay.
Firstly
,
children
are closer to their parents and they have to control their diet. Because of
this
, adults can provide them with more healthy
food
on a daily basis, rather than junk
food
or
food
with other harmful preservatives.
For instance
, we can see many television and YouTube advertisements
which are promoting
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that promote
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fast-
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fast food
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food
and unhealthy
food
items. By seeing these types of commercials
children
tend to ask for these types of diets from their parents.
However
, adults can advise them of the harm that can occur by consuming these and guide them to proper diet habits from the infant stage.
Moreover
, guardians have to direct their
child
to do more physical activities
such
as running, swimming or Gymnastics which helps to get a better metabolic system. Most of the countries have
children
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parks and jogging or cycle tracks. Society can gain the advantage for the betterment of their
child
's health.
In addition
, these types of activities will help the mental health of the
child
since they can spend time with nature.
Furthermore
, if
children
can be directed by the adults for exercise on a routine basis it will be beneficial for their future as well.
To conclude
, by going through the above points we can comprehend that, the predominant responsibility of
child
health depends on the adult's direction, but not within the government's hands.
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