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Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an official international language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify countries and cause a loss of culture. What are your opinions on this?

#people #language #countries #loss #culture
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Today,
people
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 speak many
languages
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 all over the world.
According to
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 a group of
people
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, the prime option that should be considered is to have an official international
language
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,
while
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 in the opinion of
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others,
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 will cause the
culture
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 of a
country
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 to be lost and the identity
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there to be forgotten.
This
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 essay will discuss how important different
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 are for every nation’s history and why they should be saved.
Firstly
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, the different
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 of each
country
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 are based on their rich history. Studying different
languages
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 and learning about
its
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 evolution tells a lot about the identity of that society,
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, there is a field called learning ancient
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 that helps
people
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 to know the background of that
language
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 well.
Secondly
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, when all
languages
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 become a single one, all the valuable
culture
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 that accompanied that
language
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 is lost. The difference that separates
people
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 is the difference in their beliefs, which is the core of their
culture
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,
this
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 makes us humans see how much the difference in
culture
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 makes each society special and lovely. A simple example that can be mentioned is that
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in Islamic
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 countries girls don’t shake hands with men when they just see each other to say hello but it is so common in Europe countries.
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, by having only one single and official
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, all
people
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 could easily communicate with each other and there were no
language
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 problems, but
this
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 problem has been solved by declaring English as an international
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, so
people
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 can easily learn a second
language
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 and communicate with each other.
To conclude
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, the
language
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 of each
country
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 is very precious and shows how the history and identity of a
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has
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 shaped its
culture
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. Even though
people
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's monolingualism makes for quick and easy communication all over the world, it is these differences that make
people
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 special and different.
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