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Currently experiments on animals are extensively disseminated for establishing new medicines’, and to test harmlessness of other products. Some people assert that these tests must be banned, because making animals suffering is morally wrong, meanwhile other people support, since their profit for humankind.

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Writing task 2 Currently
experiments
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 on
animals
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 are extensively disseminated for establishing new
medicines’
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medicines
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, and to test
harmlessness
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the harmlessness
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 of other products. Some
people
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 assert that these tests must be banned
,
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apply
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 because making
animals
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suffering
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 is morally wrong, meanwhile other
people
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 support,
since
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them since
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their
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they
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 profit
for
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humankind. Each year
consumer
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consumers
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 and scientists are testing about
fifty-to one-hundred
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fifty to one hundred
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Millions
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 vertebrate
animals
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,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 invertebrate
animals
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 are used even more,
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however
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people
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 do not count them.
Then
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 after
experiments
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,
animals
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usually
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are usually
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 euthanized. Turning to banning animal
experiments
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, I wanted to mention some of them. There is no doubt, that household chemicals are
danger
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dangerous
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 for
people
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, but
make up
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make-up
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 is not
threat
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a threat
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 at all. (At least nowadays). In fact, testing
make up
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make-up
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 on
animals
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 is less efficient and overpriced
comparing
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 to other alternative ways of testing cosmetics.
That is
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 why each year more and more countries discourage testing beauty products, but there are still
bunch
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a bunch
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 of countries that require those
experiments
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. (F. e. China)
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 organizations
such
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 as PETA and BUAV are fighting to stop
this
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 cruel world, they believe that
experiments
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 on
animals
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became
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 outdated, and every animal has
right
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 not to be used in tests. Since there is no proof that experimenting on
animals
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 became obsolete, and
it stops
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stopped
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 developing science, I am a part of
minorities
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.
In other
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words
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words,
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 I support experimenting on
animals
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,
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apply
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 because on
other
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the other
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 hand it will push humanity to
the
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a
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 bright future.
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,
human
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the human
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 race got to
the
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space successfully, due to experimenting on
animals
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 (
first
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the first
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 vertebrate animal
on
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in
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 space Albert-1 Died, because of
chocking
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choking
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),
also
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 every medical achievement had
place
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a place
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 to be, because of those tests.
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example
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 nowadays
people
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 can grow human organs in pigs. Without experimenting on
animals
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, we couldn’t achieve that. My point is that
people
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 must continue
experiments
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 on
animals
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, but they must restrict some kind of testing
such
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 as testing for make-up.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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